Patricoo's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Spring Break: April Fools]

Very good.

Heh, I enjoyed the humor. I liked the idea and very smooth with the animation. I really wished you would have put in some backgrounds that weren't just whiteness.

Good music choice and I guess perhaps sound really wasn't neccicary in this animation. Good job, just speed it up a bit more. Needs some detail work but it's a good bit of humor.

[Choices]

Heh, College Films...

Ahh yes I've made a few of these. Go take it to You Tube first...

Secondly, when you make a movie, take into consideration setting and objects. A bottle rolling has little effect, unless it's smashed, dirty, open. It just has to LOOK bad. Everything you show here is nice and pretty, down to the clothes and car... You can indeed pull off a rich looking dirty scene, but everything can't just be spotless like that.

I didn't take like that lighting either indoors. It just looked like you didn't whitebalance.

[Strings~*]

Excellent Job!

This is an excellent piece of art!

Excellent charactor and setting design, and a great beat choice along with the sync. It was set up well and then pulled off just as nice.

The fade effects were originally very well done, but I worried they became too heavy in the late middle, and actually hurt my eyes a bit. It could have probably used a bit more action and that may be the one thing that keeps it from the front page. Otherwise excellent job. It's something to be proud of.

[Whuttevvah 2]

Much better.

Much better then your other submission, and I disagree with the person saying it should be longer. It's just fine. Any longer and I would have lost intrest.

This style and movement is very nice, and I hope to see improvement as it goes on. Now, I think your right. You don't need a story, but you need some sort of substance or just something to change to originality. I hope I don't see the golf flag and the tank 100 times again in the next one. Move to more colors, more objects on the screen at one, or try a series where the one string just keeps evolving. I agree. Sometimes creative people don't need a story but a canvas to just do some art on.

Perhaps after you get some experience you could team with a good writer. I hope to see improvment if and when I see more of these.

And FYI, Polymorphic 'Fly Like an Eagle' is a poor choice. Heh.

Glunnator responds:

Thanks. And yeah, I haven't got much good music.
I generally want music without lyrics so I can be really free in what I do. If you have any suggestions on where to find such music, I'd be very happy with it :)

[Gaia Ninjas Preview.]

Good but...

I like the punchline used and done with here. It's very funny and well done.

Problem? Graphics/storyboard issue. Why would you submit unfinished work? You can't get too excited and show the world whats not done even though your proud of what you've got. And alot of people, when they give something almost done, don't finish it. Considering it old or boring and move on to something else. Finish first!

Secondly, you run in some serious anime-like flaws that are evident when someone wants to make something really easy. Go for the harder work. Instead of the bust-shot closeups and the wierd cut-aways that are really close or really far, go for the knee-up shot with the body movement. I worry you'll fall into steryo-typical anime theme rather than something original and to your own style.

[The Cretaceous Period]

A good science project.

This was a very plesent little animation for what seems like just for a science class or possibly history.

I'd like to break it down.

Your animation is okay, but you need to work on your motion tweens. Notibly, your raptor tail wiggles, showing the background. You can fix this by having the body go further as an under layer and over lap with the tail. This way when the tail moves, it shows the underlayer of the moving object instead of the background itself. It's hard to explain in text. Just watch some other medium quality animations and studdy the motion.

Your narriation is also dry. Very very 'like your in class.' On of the speech tricks is to know your speech so well that you don't read from the paper. Being on a computer and doing this is easy since you can do it sentance by sentance and use a sound editing program (even a low quality one) and edit it.

Of course, I'm sure you were mostly going for the good original grade rather than the majestic flash piece. Just trying to give some helpful creative critisim, and I hope you earned an A. Better than most of the crap I've seen turned in.

[Cash Out]

Hey I like this!

An excellent production with only a few minor faults from keeping it back from the high ground.

It has a very good sense of humor actually making me laugh a few times (and I spend most of my time on newgrounds rating flashes with my knuckle in my chin) while the animation was very good. It lacked some detail, and some of the jokes looked like they were just trying to hard (guyyyyyyyyyyy). The voice acting sounded fake in many cases, but don't let my critisims keep you down. I only nit pick becuase there is so much good here that I have to search the cracks for something for you to work on.

Keep going, make more, and keep doing a good job!

[Noobs Vs l33t: Episode 1]

Good! Doesn't require length.

Sometimes movies require length to fit with thier graphics, this way it becomes a full movie. This one however, delivers much like a comic strip. It mostly goes for one quirky straight hit punchline. It's a good punchline, and it's a good joke. There doesn't need to be more so long as everyone acknoledges it as a fairly good quality ten second short.

[Orange VS. Spartan 1]

Again,

Again, you have an ability to animate. It's a shame it's wasted on crew animations and random needless and plotless flashes. Please take a serious effort. You and your friends could do some great things but instead your looked down upon by other reviewers.

[~BB~ Fuck the [SS] collab]

Ugh.

YOU HAVE AN ABILITY TO ANIMATE! Really! Please! you have some skill an ability to make items of great quality! Your talent goes wasted collaborating with such a crowd.

Smiley-Bob responds:

Witch one of us has the ability to animate?