Amatureness shows but potential is amazing
That was very well done. Though your lack of experience shows, it also shows that you have unlimited potential that you can be better with only time.
More specificly, the messige and song are a great choice and though the detail isn't huge, the effort is amazing. For a first flash movie I can only image how much time and effort this took to complete.
You should keep working and get yourself known. It's good to get stuff on Newgrounds for getting yourself judged, but it's rare you'll ever really be noticed because of all the other people along side you. I reccomend submitting this to flashplayer dot com, or do a better one later and give that a shot.
And to everyone else and about the messige, you'll agree with it wholeheartedly, but will you follow it?